Friday, November 18, 2011
The Little Boy
One day there was a little man that name Jesus. Every day he go to school there are two boys that hit him. When he get home his dad get mad because Jesus dose not know how to fight.His dad told Jesus that he was going to boxing and when his dad left him in boxing he never go in . The other day he went to school the two boys that punch him in the face wean he got home he put mack up in his eye in his dad saw him and his dad hit him.
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This story was good because they gave a description of the man but needed to add more detail.
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